Redux
Time for bed, long day over.
her thoughts slow
tired
needs her bed now
slides under clean sheets
sighing now
her nerves easing up
last minute thoughts swirl
one more solution eeked out
returning to calm
tiny drips of rain
nature’s language speaks outside
lulling her to sleep
wind
wafting through
the open window
caresses her blonde hair
sweetly
But this woman named Bocks
mightily tossed and turned her locks.
Diligently tried to get settled,
to feel tucked in and nestled.
Shouldn’t have had whiskey on the rocks.
She
wishes
for a quick
turn into the
void.
It’s
slow to
happen though.
Turning, tossing
She asks “When will this sleep finally come?”
slowly
but surely, dear
your dreams are calling you
today becomes a memory
drifting
Finally, she sleeps!
Eyes fully closed and relaxed.
Slight snores can be heard
escaping from her moist lips.
Little tics move her fingers.
dreaming
floating on air
meeting her younger self
the mini-me says hi to her
hugs, kisses, joy, and fun to be had now
playing high in the clouds with glee
such a good time they had
with each other
dreaming
But
now it’s
time to go
back to the real
world again. So sad.
Wake up, says the alarm!
Time to get up for work now.
A new day to do it over
again, only to head back to this
bed once more to slumber very deeply.
Can you identify all the styles?
Originally published April 1, 2019, on I Write Her.

Wow, Susi! You’re impressive. ❣️
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<3 And you’re so kind, Eugenia! Thank you so much for the praise. I’m so happy you enjoyed it!
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You’re welcome, Susi!
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When I dream it is a bit like this.
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Oh, no! I keep hoping my sleeping will get better, but then I’m back in this cycle again. :( Maybe tonight it’ll be better? Thanks for reading, Diana!
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No worries, 🥰
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I sure can. I am a terrible sleeper and a vivid dreamer. This was a journey through it all for me. So nicely done.
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Awesome! Yes, I have days exactly as depicted in this piece. I don’t enjoy those nights at all! Glad you enjoyed it. Here’s to us both having a good night’s sleep tonight. ;)
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A lovely sleep time adventure. I’m no good at recognizing poetic forms but I loved this poem.
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I’m glad you enjoyed it, Sadje! Some nights it really is an adventure! lol
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Very true 🙏🏼
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:)
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This was such a fun and cozy read!!! I loved how you blended different styles and transitions felt so natural. It was like dreaming in poetry…Beautifully done!!
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So happy that you liked it, Nathi! It was fun to write. :) I like that you said it felt like dreaming in poetry. That’s a real good description. <3
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Susi, that kind of blending is hard to pull off and you made it feel effortless. I really admire that♥️
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<3 Very kind of you to say, Nathi. Thank you!
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