Inspired by Sadje’s What do you see #108
they’d made it out
of the concrete jungle
the surroundings now
pleasant and uplifting
no police chases at 3 am
or ambulance runs shortly thereafter
birds whistling greeted them now
fresh, sweet-smelling air
wafted through the windows
chores made more pleasant
by a pleasing atmosphere
life was good!
the day started out
as any other
a hot, satisfying breakfast
lunches being made
cheeks and lips kissed goodbye with a smile
she looked forward to her day
the lady of the house
showered, primped, and dressed
she headed for the grocery store
tonight would be a special occasion
a celebration of his promotion
the fruits of his efforts to get ahead
she didn’t hear the car approach
as she closed the front door
and began to lock the deadbolt
her hand slipped from the keys
when the first bullet hit
the second one ripped through the back of her head
and pierced the wooden frame
her body crumpled to the ground
blood oozing rhythmically from her fatal wounds
a last thought crossed her mind
before fading into darkness
“the grass wasn’t greener on the other side”
Yikes! Guess I’ll stay in the city…oh, wait, I live in a small town…😅 Great take, Susi! ❤️
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LOL Glad you enjoyed it, Jeff! ❤
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Haha. I did, indeed. You’re welcome. Always! ❤️
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Rather gruesome … but good!
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Excellent! Thanks, Nan!!
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Oh wow!!!! Just when you think you’re safe and tucked away.
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LOL Yup, then some crazy stuff happens! 😉
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Vivid narrative. Nice portrayal of a sudden end.
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Thank you! Mission accomplished. 😉
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Oh my word, Susi, I wasn’t expecting that! 😨
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Excellent! 🙂 That’s what I was going for! Glad I could evoke that response, Chris.
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Wow, you slowly grabbed my undivided attention!
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Excellent! Gld you liked it, Geoff! 🙂
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Stark and violent – you set me up, took me in, smoothed out the worry – and then the end… the photo now makes all the sense in the world!
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Oh, I like how you say it, Val. Exactly what I was trying to achieve. 🙂
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Oh no! Such a sad end to an idyllic day. Thanks for joining in Susi with this very moving and real story.
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Inorite?!?! Why does it always have to end in tragedy?? 😉
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Reality is often harder than fiction.
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True.
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👍🏼
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Oh my!! You’ve set up the scene beautifully for the finish, Susi. 🙂
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Thanks so much, Aishwarya! 🙂
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You are welcome, Susi. 🙂
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Ouch!
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Yeah, I’m guessing she wasn’t in pain for long. 😉
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😅
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the bell rung
she was so high strung
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Possibly.
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