With a tight grip on the flashlight, I pushed open the door. The creaking would unhinge even the strongest of thrill-seekers. Stepping inside the room, every hair on my head stood at attention, my breathing stilled to small, rapid intakes of air. I was afraid. While my ears and eyes were laser-focused on the creepy surroundings, the nauseating stench of rot filled my nostrils.
I lost my ability to remain calm as the light beam revealed mountains of hacked-up bodies; blood trails everywhere.
“You’re next,” whispered the voice behind me.
I could only gurgle as the knife sliced my throat.
This is so gruesome! Whispers from behind would just kill a person.
Loved it. 🙂
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Excellent! Glad you got that feeling, Terveen. Mission accomplished. 🙂 Thank you!
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Very cleaver, that is a bit scary. Very well done, I like the ending, she was looking at her own demise. The last line is a great one. xoxo
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Awesome, glad you enjoyed it!
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You should do more of these stories Susi, that was really entertaining. Hugs 🤗 Joni
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Every Sunday!
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Oh yea! ❤️
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Now I’m going to have nightmares!!!
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LOL That wasn’t my intention! 😉
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horrifying
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Very! Glad that came across! 🙂
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Now that is quite a tale. So much fear and horror in so few words.Very Alfred Hitchcock-esque. Great write, Susi.
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Excellent! Exactly what I was going for. 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it, Goff! 🙂
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Great write. Keep Smiling.
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🙂
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Cheers.
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Oh, no…
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Excellent! 😉
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Wow! Creepy!
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Yes! 🙂
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Awfully gruesome. Brilliant writing
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❤ Thank you, Sadje! Means a lot as this was rejected in a competition. However, their feedback helped improve the story, so I'm glad it's being received well here. 🙂
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You’re welcome! I love when people give pointers on how to improve our writing instead of saying it’s good or bad.
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I guess it depends on the volume they receive.
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Yeah, that’s for sure.
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