once safe and sound
our motion
jostling harmoniously
clicketing along predictably
but that train
left the station
leaving a trail of debris
in the crash
reeling emotions screech
as the brakes are put on
full stop
the damage is extensive
such a jagged mess
to clean up
but the nugatory efforts
fail
It is loud and clear. Powerful.
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Thank you, Indira!
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I love the metaphor echoing so strongly in this piece! Beautifully portrayed, both the words and image coming together to form a powerful statement about human nature.
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Thank you, Tien! I was hoping that it came across loud and clear. ā¤
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It did, m’am, it did!
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I had a question about the photo, but I got off track and lost my train of thought. Perhaps it’s just as well — I think I had a loco motive.
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LOL you clever wordsmith!! ā¤
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Wow, great interpretation of an amazing photo. Nice one Susi šš»
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Thanks, John! ā¤
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Your welcome.
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beautiful and powerfully used metaphor
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⤠Appreciate your kind words, Gina!
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Lovely writing, Susi. I have nominated you for the Sunshine Blogger Award. Hope you participate šš
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Thank you, Kritika! I just read your post. Appreciate that! I’ll try to post today. š
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Welcome šš Take your time š
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